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Tuesday, March 22, 2011

The Visits - Mag 58


Watching them leave
emptiness all around
back to the start.
ten steps back for
 every half step forward..
this macabre dance 
at the end of each month.

Pausing by the calendar 
circling the same digits
of a new Gregorian phase.
The lights turned dim
the shadows on the wall,
glinting metal and shield.

This gift was a curse
breaking ties apart
the folklore said.
Too late to heed
the damage ran deep,
visitation rights wasn't
all this warrior craved.


15 Musings:

Paulami said...

amazing! i find these kinds very powerful !!

TS Hendrik said...

That is just fantastic.

DebbyMc said...

Poignant and well done. Touching...

Tess Kincaid said...

Excellent.

Bikram said...

I need to take classes from you and learn how to write so nicely ...

Bikram's

Jinksy said...

Visitation rigts?! What a distance you travelled for this image...so much story untold...

cosmos cami said...

The story here is left a mystery, but the words swirl around in my head beautifully. Well done!

Louise said...

I like the sound your words make, very well crafted.

Vinay Leo R. said...

creativity very profound! liked this!

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Martin said...

Nicely written piece.

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Reflections said...

Creative, profound piece... words, thoughts continue to mill around the corners of my mind, trying to decipher the mystery left unsaid. Great take on the prompt.

sm said...

gift was a curse
beautiful

Tomz said...

loved it..found it as a wonderful poem about the passage of time..or at least i felt so..

Brother Ollie said...

You weave a fine tale!

Rawknrobyn.blogspot.com said...

This is an amazing way of mixing an ancient feel with contemporary realities. You once again inspire.
xoRobyn